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Alex's face stayed calm and relaxed. Even though his heart beat frantically against chest, sending a shock of pain through his already sore rib cage.
Now that his blood was rushing to his heart, his head was beginning to clear, he was able to think.Alex's eyes slid to the man sitting by his bed side. He had seen this mans wrinkled face before. His dress clothes were too well made, to be those of a day to day guards.
"Have you made up your mind about a name?" the man asked.
"Sì," Alex spoke with no shift in his voice. "LeVar Capitano. That is your name correct? Captainof the Florentine Guards." LeVar raised an eye brow. "You can remember that, but not whether your name is John or Alex?" Annoyance slipped heavily into his voice.
"Correggere." Alex spoke with a slight smirk coming to his face. "I know your name because I saw a flyer about the citizens of Firenze being watched. It had your name and photo on it." As Alex was telling him this, his eyes were slowly sliding back up to gaze at the ceiling."Well we know who I am… but again who are you?" Questioned LeVar. Again Alex veered away from the topic.
"Maybe you should tell who this Alex what was it Romuno…Ramano…Romane-"
"Romano." LeVar supplied.
"Sì, that was it, Alex Romano. Tell me about him."
Stumbling over his own last name proved to be hard yet helpful, for LeVar began to speak his knowledge of Alex as if; Alex had just left the room.
"From what I know" He said, his Italian accent slipping away, while another more pronounce done took its place. Which lead Alex to believe that, Mr. Capitano had not lived in Italia his wholelife.
LeVar continued "He played a big part in the kidnapping of Julianne, the daughter of a very powerful French Barren." A lot of what LeVar knew or more so what he believed he knew were mostly lies and made up stories. Alex wished that half of what LeVar had spoken of too be true.Yet the only true fact spoken was that he had played a part in the kidnapping.
"Hello?" LeVar said, snapping his fingers in Alex's face a few times. "Mi dispiace…I was
beginning to get dizzy again." Alex spat out. "This Alex certainly sounds like a man who gets around." LeVar nodded, pinning Alex with a look of suspicion.
"Well…" LeVar started again. Out of the corner of Alex's eye he saw a white flash, near LeVar.The next thing Alex knew was that LeVar was laying face first on the floor, unconscious, the hooded man standing behind him. "A proposito di tempo." Alex said, with a slight coldness coating his voice.
Italian Words and Phrases:
Sì – Yes
Correggere – Correct
Firenze - Florence
Mi dispiace – I'm sorry
A proposito di tempo – About time
Now that his blood was rushing to his heart, his head was beginning to clear, he was able to think.Alex's eyes slid to the man sitting by his bed side. He had seen this mans wrinkled face before. His dress clothes were too well made, to be those of a day to day guards.
"Have you made up your mind about a name?" the man asked.
"Sì," Alex spoke with no shift in his voice. "LeVar Capitano. That is your name correct? Captainof the Florentine Guards." LeVar raised an eye brow. "You can remember that, but not whether your name is John or Alex?" Annoyance slipped heavily into his voice.
"Correggere." Alex spoke with a slight smirk coming to his face. "I know your name because I saw a flyer about the citizens of Firenze being watched. It had your name and photo on it." As Alex was telling him this, his eyes were slowly sliding back up to gaze at the ceiling."Well we know who I am… but again who are you?" Questioned LeVar. Again Alex veered away from the topic.
"Maybe you should tell who this Alex what was it Romuno…Ramano…Romane-"
"Romano." LeVar supplied.
"Sì, that was it, Alex Romano. Tell me about him."
Stumbling over his own last name proved to be hard yet helpful, for LeVar began to speak his knowledge of Alex as if; Alex had just left the room.
"From what I know" He said, his Italian accent slipping away, while another more pronounce done took its place. Which lead Alex to believe that, Mr. Capitano had not lived in Italia his wholelife.
LeVar continued "He played a big part in the kidnapping of Julianne, the daughter of a very powerful French Barren." A lot of what LeVar knew or more so what he believed he knew were mostly lies and made up stories. Alex wished that half of what LeVar had spoken of too be true.Yet the only true fact spoken was that he had played a part in the kidnapping.
"Hello?" LeVar said, snapping his fingers in Alex's face a few times. "Mi dispiace…I was
beginning to get dizzy again." Alex spat out. "This Alex certainly sounds like a man who gets around." LeVar nodded, pinning Alex with a look of suspicion.
"Well…" LeVar started again. Out of the corner of Alex's eye he saw a white flash, near LeVar.The next thing Alex knew was that LeVar was laying face first on the floor, unconscious, the hooded man standing behind him. "A proposito di tempo." Alex said, with a slight coldness coating his voice.
Italian Words and Phrases:
Sì – Yes
Correggere – Correct
Firenze - Florence
Mi dispiace – I'm sorry
A proposito di tempo – About time
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Really good chapter. It's an excellent beginning; hooking the reader on so that they continue reading, but not really revealing too much of the story line. I absolutely LOVELOVELOVE the fact that you included those italian words in there, which makes it so much more real and culturally rewarding (considering the fact that I'm going italy in two years! WHEEEEE!).
Again, just pointing out those little grammatical and spelling mistakes. As well as this one part that kind of disturbed me: "Yet the only true fact spoken was that he had played a part in the kidnapping." It felt weird reading that paragraph because when you included LeVar's dialogue, it seems he ONLY DID speak of the kidnapping, nothing else that may be untrue. So if you want to make it work, include some of the false info in the actual dialogue, instead of just NARRATING that he said a lot of untrue stuff (if you get drift...).
Again, just pointing out those little grammatical and spelling mistakes. As well as this one part that kind of disturbed me: "Yet the only true fact spoken was that he had played a part in the kidnapping." It felt weird reading that paragraph because when you included LeVar's dialogue, it seems he ONLY DID speak of the kidnapping, nothing else that may be untrue. So if you want to make it work, include some of the false info in the actual dialogue, instead of just NARRATING that he said a lot of untrue stuff (if you get drift...).